I enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. However, I found a little hard to hear since you recorded the video outdoors and there is noise in the background. Maybe next time try to do it inside or speak a little louder. Other than that I think you described your solution pretty well. You stated the problem, the solution, and you had a hook at the beginning, and a nice conclusion phrase. Also, I am thinking that in the "who" you should not include women who use bags since they would not need a place to put their phones or wallets since it will be already in their bag.
Allyson, Overall the substance of your pitch was strong. Like Matilde though, I also struggled to hear what you were saying during the video. Also, your delivery seemed somewhat subdued. If I was judging a pitching contest, I would want someone to seem much more extroverted and enthusiastic about their idea. This is a great start to perfecting an outstanding pitch though.
Hello Allyson, I really liked your pitch. Your body language is good and the dialogue was well though, however the audio is difficult to hear with a lot of background noise. Personally more enthusiasm and more lively selling would sell for a stronger pitch. Think of a stronger hook but other than that you're on the path so best of luck there!
Hello Allyson,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. However, I found a little hard to hear since you recorded the video outdoors and there is noise in the background. Maybe next time try to do it inside or speak a little louder. Other than that I think you described your solution pretty well. You stated the problem, the solution, and you had a hook at the beginning, and a nice conclusion phrase. Also, I am thinking that in the "who" you should not include women who use bags since they would not need a place to put their phones or wallets since it will be already in their bag.
Allyson,
ReplyDeleteOverall the substance of your pitch was strong. Like Matilde though, I also struggled to hear what you were saying during the video. Also, your delivery seemed somewhat subdued. If I was judging a pitching contest, I would want someone to seem much more extroverted and enthusiastic about their idea. This is a great start to perfecting an outstanding pitch though.
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ReplyDeleteHello Allyson,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your pitch. Your body language is good and the dialogue was well though, however the audio is difficult to hear with a lot of background noise. Personally more enthusiasm and more lively selling would sell for a stronger pitch. Think of a stronger hook but other than that you're on the path so best of luck there!